Time for another review!
This week, we have Fallstreak #1 by L. A. Arden. They’re a one-person shop, doing all the writing, art, colors, and lettering. There’s no editor.
As always, we’re on the Prince song system: Adore means buy it, Beautiful Strange means take it or leave it, and When Doves Cry means don’t buy it.
This issue says that it’s about “artificial intelligence, a gun, ballet, and a man from the Patent Office.” Very little of that comes through.
The story starts out with what looks like dodecahedrons on a table, and there’s a woman who calls for someone else and says they’re dancing. She hears a thud, and then goes to investigate. A man with a gun who states he’s from the Patent Office then steals the objects on the table and runs away (without shooting her). He goes upstairs, heads outside, and from the top of the building he’s in, he sees that a ballet is being performed in another building. The end.
This story is 20 pages, and it’s a waste of time. The objects on the table don’t really move all that much, and there’s no explanation as to what they are or why they have motive power. There’s no explanation as to who the woman is. There’s no reason given why the guy with the gun steals the objects—and especially no reason given as to why he kills one person but not the other. There’s no reason given for anything. It’s a colossal waste of time.
The story is slow. It doesn’t take 20 pages to go through this. This entire “story” could have been told in 5 pages. That means there’s 15 pages of padding. That’s terrible.
The art is nice. The art is the only thing that’s nice about this piece. There’s only a single place where the anatomy is bad, with the man looking more like Mr. Fantastic than a regular human, but that’s okay. However, the art and coloring is supposed to be nice. That’s the job of the artist. (And yes, the gun used could use more reference. It just looks really fake.) Anyway, things are in proportion, and I was never lost in the story. Bored, yes, but never lost.
The coloring is nice. I have no complaints about that.
I’m not a fan of the lettering. First, there isn’t enough dialogue, and second, the font used is a challenge to read. And when I say there isn’t enough dialogue, I mean there are a total of 16 words here, to include a single sound effect. (Why there’s a sound effect of possibly a body hitting the floor but not of the shot that did it is puzzling.) It’s hard to assess if the writing is any good when the sample size is so small, but the font chosen isn’t helpful when it comes to legibility.
The fact that there’s no editor here is extremely easy to see. Again, this is a five page story that was allowed to balloon out to twenty pages. Even a halfway decent editor should be able to tell a creator that this is padding and they need more story.
This just isn’t good.
Final Verdict: When Doves Cry